Fall From Grace

An angel clips her wings

In hopes of flying close

To the majestic eagle,

By destroying her perfect span

God has graced her with,

The balance of the halo is gone,

Causing her to crash into

The devil’s threshold,

Now she is left with no choice

But to sacrifice her innocence

To save her sanctuary's secrets,

And forever be marked

With the number of the beast.

Reviews

[Marie]

I see you changed the thir to last line; much better. Poor angel--she should have known better...

[Jennie Baron]

Love the edits you've made. You came up with a better solution for my suggestion. "To save her sanctuary's secrets" has a good rhythm and I like the alliteration. "The number of the beast" is a powerful image also. I think I'm going to save this in my favorites.

[DIVYA]

This poem is tragic yet intriguing. Written about an angel and the devil yet sounds familiar....you wrote so beautifully and convincingly.

[Namrata]

The balance of the Halo is gone- metaphorically rich as this poem it reminds me of the poem,"Sick Rose" by William Blake. A tempting down to earth read.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you so much, that is a great compliment comparing my poem to William Blake. I don't remember that poem so I will have to check it out.

[AprilRN1210]

Lust, temptation can be a dangerous thing, especially when falling for the bad boy. nice job

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much, well I am only half bad boy though, The rest is a hopeless romantic.

[Renée]

Powerful…. that last line makes me cringe..

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thanks Big Sis, cringe? Hmmm first time I did that to anybody, well with my poetry. LOL

[Renée]

All I can say is Powerful… to go any further would take a night of discussion of this poem… it is a great one ! Mention " the mark of the beast" I hiss like a vampire near garlic lol just a normal reaction of the Christian kind q ;

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Make you hiss huh? is ir wrong that I like that I made you do that? LOL

[Renée]

lol !!! Make me hiss away Bro ! ( :

[Matching Socks]

Cowboy... This is just the best poem you've ever written.
Such a great reminder that we must remain true to who we are.
Bravo. :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Wow thank you so much :)))

[Bright Ocean Star]

This one is very sad, Cowboy. No angel should sacrifice her wings for anyone. Bad boys aren't worth it in the end, and the last line gives me chills. Great write, my friend.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much.

[Frieda P]

Sounds like falling in love with a bad boy....been there, the eagle isn't so hot, and not worth the fall.

Tripped a bit over 'to save the home she love's secrets'....but I got it.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much Moonbeam, anyone falls for me better seek psyciactric help immediately.

[Frieda P]

I CONCUR ;) I mean, you're welcome Dale...

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I knew you would agree, LOL

[Frieda P]

You know me too well, I'm gonna have to change it up and act nice LOL ;P

[Corset]

Very Poe-ish :) I have no clue about the punctuation, so I will leave that to Jennie below, I am trying to figure out how this makes me feel, sad for her, I think, but in a bizarre way I want to cheer for her, lol.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

First off I love being compared to Poe so thank you, secondly I like that you are not sure how to feel, lets me know my word are moving you in a mysterious way… so thank you.

[Corset]

:)..............