I Will Bleed

I will bleed for those I love

taking a bullet or knife.

I will not bleed for just myself.

 

I will bleed for the poor

to enrich their lives.

I will not bleed to make you rich.

 

I will bleed for honor

if it is in question.

I will not bleed for foolish pride.

 

I will bleed for humanity

when it cries out.

I will not bleed to prove I’m human.

 

I will bleed for you

even if in return

your blood runs cold for me.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

This is virtually an oath of allegiance, it displays unselfishness and loyalty in a very powerful yet straightforward way. Then, the reader reaches those final three lines and knows that what came before is leading up to the deep feelings of: 'I will bleed for you / even if in return / your blood runs cold for me'

It's a mix of sadness and strength. Thank you for sharing this post.

[T]

Your compassion as well as your convictions speak volumes, Cowboy ...
Wonderfully penned!
Hugs,
Tiana

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Somehow, I believe this about you. After reading your work, I find you to be such an uncomplicated, complicated man . . . LOL . . . much like me, although, I'm not a man *winks*

These words resonate how I feel. I would gladly put myself before those I love. I try to. Each and every day. Although I am far from perfect.

A touching write, dear Cowboy.

Saddle me up :)

[Laura Sparkle]

I loved the message you send in this piece, the subtle shades between right and showy. :) It's an honorable thing to do something right and decline the 'reward' that may come with it. Well done, Dale. You punctured right through and delivered.

[OceanTropic]

Wow, that''s AMAZING. I LOVE it. I love how you wrote it. You distinguished it precisely, you will bleed for humanity but not to prove you are human. I loved it. It reminds me of something I would write lol. It is very selfless as well. Great great piece!

[MistyJRose]

Great poem. I like the matter of factness in it, and i like the message you try to convey. that there are just somethings you wouldn't bleed for. I can completely agree with this. Thanks for sending it my way to read.

[O!]

I will bleed for humanity but not to prove I'm human....I have never heard that been said before and i just loved it.
It is a very strong poem and keeping it short makes it even more powerful...coz its to the point!

Thank you for writing this.

x,
O!

[Sally Edwards]

Very powerful poem, your feeling clearly explained through your words.

I will bleed for you
even if in return
your blood runs cold for me.

Very dark words, sent a shiver down my spine, excellent write

[BrightEyes]

I liked how your words clearly defined the line between the worthy and the petty in each stanza. This is a powerful piece in my opinion. Clearly stating where you stand in relation to the world. The last stanza packs a punch - making the transition from social piece to a more personal one. very intriguing ending - excellent job.


laura

[ELii]

Very dark. Liked the flow of the words.