What You Can Not See

  

Shadows creep along rusted walls

Using the cover of night’s blanket

To whisper things never spoken

Only to choke on their own tongues.

 

Without a voice they carve it in stone

Using fingernails until they bleed

Making the sacrifice for all they seek

In attempts to destroy mankind’s alter ego.

 

Wrapped up in stealth tendencies and using

Superficial death as the weapon of choice

To bring down the enemy that built this great wall

And find the source of its evil power.

 

Relentless and against popular demand

Tirelessly they work without praise

For it is that you cannot see

That can build or destroy your dreams.

Reviews

[Lizanne]

Maybe the political prison, with no government to speak up for us. Could be inscribing our own tombstones from the lack of fighting back against this monster that we have allowed to grow and is now consuming us.
If that is correct then we know the source of its evil power. Popular demand is to allow it to continue to grow in presence until common man is so far gone that government takes over the management of our children creating a civilization of human drones to do their bidding. Perhaps we are on the cusp of an uprising or rebellion. Whatever the outcome, this is a brillantly dark and visual writing. I can actually see the finger writing on the wall. A wonderful metaphor filled work.

[just is]

Wow! This write is so wonderful, I like this one alot. Like poetry writer said this is interesting. wonderful write.

[Angel Baby]

Very interesting piece, found it a great pleasure to read....sad, but made do a lot of thinking which is a good thing...LOL. You do have a way words...keep inking the pages as I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. P.W.

[Brette Medb]

Damn! This was creepy and really, really good. The dark images were perfect.


Without a voice they carve it in stone
Using fingernails until they bleed
Making the sacrifice for all they seek

These were by far my favorite lines. Great write!


Brette

[Jessi]

WOW I enjoyed reading this one. Its a wonderful write. GREAT JOB

[Midnight Rose ~*Anna Ro..]

Seems like how the world is today. Marvelous write, Dale. Another powerfully written piece. My favorite =).. but I think all of yours pretty much are. Awesome write.

~*AnnaRose*~