Breath Then Blink

 

The structure might change

But the foundation remains the same…

A brick covered in ashes is still a brick.

The truth is underneath,

The surface is just a mirror;

       Sometimes cracked.

Eyes are only a map to the truth,

Subconscious is the navigator;

Just too often speaking in tongues,

Complicating internal faith…

So to move forward in times of change

Is nothing more than a breath then blink.

Reviews

[just rose.]

I like how the structure of this is almost-riddle-like, making me go back and read again. With a complicated notion expressed here, I find it speaking to me on more than one level, which, of course, is suggested by the meaning of the poem itself. And so my physical reading experience of this piece is thematically related to the subject matter. Which is an extremely difficult thing to pull off -- I've only seen it done before by Edgar Allan Poe. Love this!

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of course, a rose by any other name would still smell as sweet...

[Liza]

the air we breathe is there for the taking - that is how we live; we don't have to remember to inhale or exhale but when we do consciously practice sips of deep breaths - our bodies and minds calm down - thank you for featuring again - i needed that reminder...perhaps daily.

[Phoenix]

There is so much in so few words. I feel that I need to read it many times over to truely understand and appreciate all it has to offer.

[Norma M Sutton]

I like it.

[ShaneBerry]

wow never read one like this one before! i liked it alot! you seemed to have put alot of thought into this :O ;}

[Liza]

insightful and breaks into the core of all matters...what lies within is still raw; no matter what covers we try to hide in...i enjoyed the write.

[jeff hackworth]

nice metaphors great poem

[LeeLee Ryder]

B.T.B. has some memorable profound phrases thru out ...
Loved the simplicity & elegance of these lines:
" Eyes are only a map to the truth" &
"Subconscious is the navigator"
the last line really hits home. We need to re-cleanse
our minds with a breath of fresh air (so to speak)
blink the cobwebs from our eyes and move forward...
BRAVO!
LLR