Breath Then Blink

 

The structure might change

But the foundation remains the same…

A brick covered in ashes is still a brick.

The truth is underneath,

The surface is just a mirror;

       Sometimes cracked.

Eyes are only a map to the truth,

Subconscious is the navigator;

Just too often speaking in tongues,

Complicating internal faith…

So to move forward in times of change

Is nothing more than a breath then blink.

Reviews

[just rose.]

I like how the structure of this is almost-riddle-like, making me go back and read again. With a complicated notion expressed here, I find it speaking to me on more than one level, which, of course, is suggested by the meaning of the poem itself. And so my physical reading experience of this piece is thematically related to the subject matter. Which is an extremely difficult thing to pull off -- I've only seen it done before by Edgar Allan Poe. Love this!

[MagiCrystal]

No, no, no.. sometimes eyes can lie and we can't even being to see that.
The dust is what we left behind in many aspects in our lifes but you lately been writing so poetic like if you are experiencing a trance from within.
The internal faith I called it ( discernment that is a gift an inner voice that never fails us if we stop and lessen) For you could be like a breath. But sometimes the spirit takes over us and we do speak in tongues..This piece make me so peaceful in many ways.. time is all we have. Keep reaching for the Heavens.. Sky is not the limit.. I tell that to all my friends.. keep going! Don't stop!

[Jenny Nelson]

Wow, I can't really find the words to review this well except to say I understand exactly where this write is coming from. I love the way it's worded. Excellent word choice to be a pleasure to read and to make great observations.

[Tina Kline]

I like this. The truth is always there, a person just has to want to find it. Very nice.

[Georgia Gypsy]

I hear the subconcious speaking through the words between the lines of this poem, how we question obvious things and follow easy paths to avoid better things in life because we fear change...faith is a hard thing sometimes, but believing is easier with the right person in your life....
Nicely done cowboy!
love the message!

[QuietPoet]

Very nice and beautiful. I love the idea and its creative. I enjoyed it.

[An Ordinary Woman]

The structure might change
But the foundation remains the same…

So true. I just helped skin a greenhouse and can attest your right on. *winks

[Ed Hart]

I like the way you keep reaching.

[Poetic Beauty]

I love this free flow poem. Great job. The imagery you create is wonderful in a short piece. Love it.