washing my hands

not quite sure... random bits from an old piece combined with newer thoughts

put the pen
to the paper
and press the envelope
with my fingers
on the keys
I play this tune for you
ignorance and arrogance
are what you're about
lying, your favorite pastime
I wanna learn
how to be like you
tell me please
so I can catch your disease
until you share
I'll let it happen
wait for the break
in the dam
that'll free fury like a flood
pleading for atonement
you will be left
to bleed out
I don't wanna know you
right now
but make sure
you show me your scars
sometimes things change
and I do, too

Author's Note

photo courtesy of deviantART.

Reviews

[J-Boo]

Wow. I guess I don't really have anything constructive to share - just, wow! I love it.

[Steffi]

i liked where you said "Can i catch you disease" but you made it postive. Creative.

[Gastroc.]

i liiike this a lot. "catch your disease" .... ben lee inspired? haha. great one.

[Anne Ransom]

this is beautiful.

[Brianna Brie]

I wanna learn
how to be like you
tell me please

Good flow throughout. Really like the beginning of this poem.

[Melody P-]

this is throughout just beautiful** from start to finish-

"I don't wanna know you
right now
but make sure
you show me your scars"

a truthful, heartfelt/ugly/and eager statement..your words few with such deep meaning**
I particularly liked that section;)

thanks for the read-
great piece-

[Girl, Interrupted]

"lying, your favorite past time". "ignorance and arrogance are what you're about".
"wait for the break
in the dam
that'll free fury like a flood
pleading for atonement
you will be left
to bleed out
I don't wanna know you
right now
but make sure
you show me your scars
sometimes things change
and I do, too"

^ FAVORITE part! looooooooooooooooooooooooooved this!