Drain his blood

The pain that i feel

Can b traced back to the unwanted stranger

I must drain his half of blood in me

For I hate him

His laugh makes my neck twich

His voice makes my blood curl

But it will all be for nothing

For I will always have his face

Reviews

[Lively]

Very well expressed especially these lines:
His laugh makes my neck twich
His voice makes my blood curl

[Carrion.]

i love it,
grammar errors thought.
:D keep writing.

[alerodri]

strong, scared it gous deeper than just hate to a point of unsertanty and fear love it

[Say]

It's almost self-loathing, but not, because the hateful things come from outside... a dilemma.

[tenkyu]

dark and full of strong emotions, a cocktail of deep-seated contempt, undeniably & wickedly intruiging

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

interesting... different, i liked this, short but good, and nice interesting title as well

[Bianca La Salle]

you transcribe everything so vividly, i can definitely feel the anger and hatred, nicely written!