Moments

Every moment taken seems so wrong

Nothing makes sense anymore

Lives are changing

People are decieving

The truth comes out to a stop

New life dies in that hole

As the moments go by

The time is short

And life hurts

We can't help to see the pain

In our lives

As we stare life and death in the face

Reviews

[Muse]

Your thoughts are good. But some of the word choices are redundant. Cliche.
Descriptive words that have been overused if you know what I mean. Some advice....use a thesaurus. And I try to never when I can, use the same word twice. I'm just trying to offer some constructive help to a fellow poet.