Eldest

randomness

Living long, never last. finding love fading fast.

Old to young, New to gone.

Luck never stays, Eldest always takes.

Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I would suggest breaking the lines in half:

Living long never lasts; (needs an "s" on the end)
finding love, fading fast.
Old to young; new to gone.
Luck never stays;
eldest always takes.

While I think the break is imperative to the poem, there are also some other major issues which need to be remedied. "New to gone" sounds awkward, and "Eldest always takes" doesn't really make sense on the face of it.

When one decides to write a poem that is so short and succinct, he must take extra special care to make sure that it borders on perfection.

[Ice QueenJen]

This is a nicely done random poem about life.

[nono]

aww kinda sad but i get it a lot and i think anyone could relate to it. So good job! Beautiful.

[OkieWonKenokie]

Lovely. Really Beautiful :D. You need to post some more stuff.