Dark

In the dark

I'm falling

Hard

The pavement

Stings my palms

In the night

I'm running from evil

Fighting for my life

And the kingdoms

Author's Note

Based off of my favorite book series (Kingdom Keepers) but most of the actual ideas for this are all my own.

XXX 12/28/12

Reviews

[scripted]

nice write!!!

[.]

~ this is beautiful... again, i don't have reviewing skills... i just felt that i was reading a hero's journey...

"The pavement

Stings my palms"

~ is a particularly powerful image... i know it rather well from personal experience...

[Phillitup]

Thank you...

[.]

~ you're very welcome...

[Dr. Wood ?]

I think for your age that this is pretty good, just keep writing and you will have a bright future

[Phillitup]

Thanks

[Olivia Marie]

I love the depth you give in just 9 lines. Amazing :)

[Chris]

Pretty great poem! love the deepness of it.

[disheveledApathy]

Ah, all in a day in the life of a Kingdom Keeper. *sigh* Life is so boring sometimes. Great poem! 100/100!

[Lost in Wonderland]

Very vague choice of words which, in my opinion, added greatly to the atmosphere. the last line sparked my curiosity:) maybe a sequel poem is due? hmmm:) haha lovely write
God bless

[Phillitup]

The last line is the one most thoroughly based off of the book series I mention in my authors note. Maybe a sequel poem would be good. Thanks!

[Lost in Wonderland]

I saw, and now problem:)