A poem to Ricochet's Real Life X wife

Are you getting any better

Do you miss me in your bed

 

Is it getting any easier

The demons in your head

 

Back in the real world

From war torn lands

 

Full of animal hatred

With blood on my hands

 

Something in my eyes

that wasn't there before

 

Deep set and sinister

Violent to it's core

 

You said you didn't know me

I wasn't human anymore

 

You said times couldn't be

the way they were before

 

At least you waited for me

Didn't send me a dear john

 

At least we tried to make it

But baby now it's all gone

 

Oh baby there are times

I want to curl up and die

 

I wanted you forever

Always by my side

 

I miss you so much baby

I don't know what to do

 

The Marine corps made me

It was the only world I knew

 

I'd never been a civilian

but I left it all for you

 

I felt you slipping away

It's what I had to do

 

I thought if I were home

Everything would be OK

 

But that witch in your head

Had to have things her way

 

That Conniving evil b***h

That made you binge and purge

 

Workout three hours a day

and kept you on the verge

 

There was evil in your head

and it turned itself on you

 

Then I came home a killer

Scarred by what I knew

 

What I knew I would do

Just following an order

 

No one was safe anymore

Everyone blew their cover

 

The Carnage I unleashed

Deadly on an M-4

 

I don't know what to make

of those memories anymore

 

All the violent things I did

My Karma's been destroyed

 

Satan's waiting for me

When I'm hell deployed

 

Now with all this Idle time

I have to spend on Earth

 

Without my Angel baby

Tell me what that's worth

 

Aimlessly wandering

A road to aching nowhere

 

Time is slipping from me

I just don't f*****g care

 

I'm nothing but a Shadow

A mal adjusted outcast

 

Nothing but a ghost

Haunting a long lost past

 

 

 

Reviews

[nigrum homonculus]

"Satan's waiting for me
When I'm hell deployed"

that is one awesome line. i seriously never knew you could go heavy like this man. i'm once again in shock. you should write like this more often. maybe not about the same subject as you said but as powerful as this. its brilliant. well done.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you PhilGod

[Geraldine]

This is overflowing with emotions. Oh the pain, the sadness, the hurt. A heartfelt and touching piece. I so loved its structure as well as the rhyming, really impressive.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thanx for reading Geraldine.

[Ama May Cooper]

Wow so strong and emotional...... i felt my heart weeping for your loss.
A very passionate and raw piece , the love you had for this woman is so strong and pure so untainted. your well wishing after all this time.
Your amazing

[Baby Ricochet]

thanx

[A love for poetry]

A resonating sound in these words; I can hear a small part of me in tune with it... Only a long road of events or a passion can help dilute those memories, and a pocket full of laughter can lessen the woes.

[Baby Ricochet]

thanx

[Annabelle Lee]

... wow....... i never really thought about what this would be like from the mans perspective. my dad was in the.corps and also went through a divorce shortly after he.was.discharged and didnt think of taking his pain into consideration.

thank you for helping me understand

[Baby Ricochet]

thanx for reading

[Baby Ricochet]

I'm glad with a honest poet of war like you.
How many have felt the same, but couldn't write about it.
Your words are like knifes, but we need to face it,
If we don't, society never will wake up.
Thank you for being you, even as our shadow poet. Loved it.
It was an army song to me.

~ E.L.

[Baby Ricochet]

thanx

yw :)

[afra]

very dark and powerful ....well done

[Baby Ricochet]

thanx

[Ruth]

Power surge of the heart here love!
Left me thinking...such loss and pain, description bold, wonderfully voiced xoxo

[Baby Ricochet]

thanx

[Mr Dunne Poetry]

I know we disagree on a lot of subjects, but I have to say this poem is so well written. I can feel the raw emotion in every word. 10/10. I'm really impressed.

[Baby Ricochet]

Yeah we do but that's OK.There's things I take personally civilians don't expect. I know the war in Iraq was every bit as corrupt as you think it is. Afganistan was little better. THe US lost a real opportunity with Afganistan when the Soviets withdrew to rebuild a devistated Nation. That was a real tragedy. I was deployed to Afganistan. Trust me bro that place was a disaster and the Taliban were nothing more than a pack of thugs.

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This is a very heartfelt piece. The ABCB structure really makes your work sing. I like how you expose your experiences of the war, and how things become complicated due to it. Great job :)

-Cord

[Baby Ricochet]

thanx