M4 haiku

I'm not sure what haiku rules are so I'm sure I'm bending the crap out of them.

Bullet to the head

bone crumbles like dead insects

the flies crawl inside

Author's Note

M4 is a rifle used by US armed forces

Reviews

[RachelReaper]

The last line was the most disturbing, it made my skin crawl.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review

[Annabelle Lee]

who knew three lines could be so disturbing?

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review

[Kaylor Mason]

That's interesting--normally when you think of gunfights, you always think of the man falling, and then you forget him--kinda like the movies. Ya don't dwell on the stench of death and decay very much . . . no one imagines rotting husks of corpses out in the desert . . . not usually, anyway

[Baby Ricochet]

A man can take a surprising number of rounds and still move. Depends on organ damage and

[Baby Ricochet]

blood losses

[Rene Velez]

haunting and morbid...

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review

[Ruth]

Dark and full circle :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review

[Mia]

Living on the wild side, are we! You should change your name to Baby rule bender.
Very powerful images! Took me by surprise...

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review

[lee von cleef]

Ricochet, wonderful, a blunt indifference.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review.

[Michael G.]

5-7-5
The definition is complicated at times it see.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review Mr G.

[Tai Ryens]

Morbidly dark, yet straightforward and shines truth. You've kept the format ( 7 - 5 - 7) and haven't defied any laws of haiku's (though imo, there are no laws to poetry). Well done.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thanks tai

[Destinyxi]

Nicely written, few words but they're all I need to picture it

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review