Frightend badboy haiku

the boy spits at me

I put my rifle in his face

He runs away screaming

Reviews

[Michael G.]

Simple ... precise.


A man of action
with very few words to say
He writes a haiku.

Haiku
A Haiku has three lines. For a traditional haiku, the first line has 5 syllables. The second line has 7 syllables. The third line has 5 syllables again.

Example

Red Rose
a red petal bends (5 syllables)
sparkling drops of dew glisten (7 syllables)
like tears they roll off (5 syllables)
- written by Gabriella 2

The traditional Japanese haiku requires some reference to nature or the season. The goal of a haiku is to capture a single moment with very few words.

A non-traditional haiku can have less than 5/7/5 syllables. A common variation is 3/5/3.

Also try "senryu" ( www. Poetry Dances )

[Baby Ricochet]

Thanks Mr G. I'm stuck with posting on my phone for a while on account of my computer crashing and I'm not going to do anything about until january. I miss writing and and this phone will drive you bat s**t crazy trying to write anything more than a dozen lines so it's time to work short

[Michael G.]

oorah!

[RachelReaper]

For some reason the way I saw this in my head was like a cartoon and it made me laugh

[Baby Ricochet]

That's okay. Thank you

[Annabelle Lee]

haa that will teach him

[Baby Ricochet]

That's for sure. Thank you for the review

[Kaylor Mason]

That little boy was lucky; he got the business end of a rifle in his face and lived to run away

[Baby Ricochet]

By now he's probably dead or in the mujahedeen.

[Rene Velez]

interesting to say the least.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review

[Seamstress]

I can bet he did run off screaming.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review

[Ruth]

Smiling :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review

[Mia]

HAHAHAHAHAHAHA...I laughed a lot more but you get my point!

[Baby Ricochet]

You get dark humor. That's good. Thank you for the review

[Corset]

Kids are products of their parents, but I imagine he won't do that again!

[Baby Ricochet]

It's likely he just stayed away from us troops after that. Thank you for the review

[Marie]

Good poem. You've already had enough advice about syllable count.

[Baby Ricochet]

USMC grunts can't count syllables. I'll use the online syllable counter avy posted about. Thank you for the review. Maria co

[lee von cleef]

Rule of corsets to cup and bind the body so all parts protrude proportionately,a Japanese thing, your words come slapping (Dead Verb) right back !

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review.