Traffic jam Senryu

Trapped in the traffic
Of a high way accident
Time crawls like dead snakes

Reviews

[rhythm&blues]

Absolutely the worst, dead snakes was a clever way to put it.

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Thank you r and b

[Peter H]

i know man it just drags along what an ordeal :

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Thank you peter

[sakshi arora]

so honest feelings penned down

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Thank you sakshi

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Thank you sakshi

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Thank you sakshi

[Ohhhwillow]

Nightmare! Nothing worse than sitting there wondering if another route would have gotten you there any sooner. I have an imagine in my head of you writing this with boredom and annoyance while in the midst of the traffic jam that makes this comical!

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Thanks for stopping by willow

[Tai Ryens]

Deceased snakes can actually still respond for hours after being beheaded, snapping at anything emitting heat within the range of its jaws, AND is still just as toxic as when it was living. I can't tell if you knew that, but it really sums it up for me at this poem; my pure boredom begging to f**k around with the neighbour drivers ;) ahahaha

[Baby Ricochet]

Ha! Goddamn snakes

[Nia Hope]

Love that last line! Awesome job :)

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Thank you ankara

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Simple and direct - a perfect piece.

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Thank you Thomas

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Traffic sucks....I love the last verse. Great job

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Thank you cord

[TL Boehm]

ooh. yes. that last line is spot on!

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Thank you TL

[Jack...]

Bumper to bumper is like gun stuck in your hair, sometimes you just need to cut out. Very cool my friend.

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Thank you jack