My Last Breath Senryu

As I breathed my last
Before I faded away
I whispered her name

Reviews

[Eddie Phillips]

I hope to be thinking about love as I leave here. Great job man!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you sir..............

[icelandicblue]

To go thinking of love is the best we can hope for.

[Baby Ricochet]

That's for sure. Thank you Blue

[Tate Morgan]

What better way to go than with the thoughts of love once known?

[Baby Ricochet]

That's for sure

[Jo Todd]

Sweet and simple, very touching

[Baby Ricochet]

Many thanks jo

[Aka.Hipster]

This is just great. Just a few sentences but you can feel the emotion in it. Good job

[Baby Ricochet]

Many thanks...........

[Ohhhwillow]

HOW DO YOU DO THESE SO DAMN WELL? This sent ripples through my tummy this evening with its sharp intensity. Great-f*****g-job Mark

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you young lady

[Chris]

You did this one beyond mere well. Take care, Chris

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Chris

[TL Boehm]

wow. Normally you run a bit irreverent, a bit flippant and a bit raw but when you become deep....it is deep indeed.Well penned

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you TL

[Kyle J. Lawson]

Incredibly short but to the point. I'm sure this indicates someone's dying words.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Kyle

[Kyle J. Lawson]

You're welcome. I know I wasn't much of help. I'm a man of few words sometimes. :0

[Leeci]

aww what a sweet poem, very romantic. so much meaning, taking your last breath and thinking about ur love :)

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you leeci