My Last Breath Senryu

As I breathed my last
Before I faded away
I whispered her name

Reviews

[Seamstress]

Aww, who knew you could be a romantic. This is so very sweet.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Seamstress. It's good to see you again

[Seamstress]

I've missed it here but it hurt as well to come and spend any length of time without seeing my Tattered Teddy since his passing.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Very emotional...I suppose that we can all hope for such things. We can all hope that our "last breath" will be filled with thoughts (and names) of the ones we cherished the most. Short, sweet, nice form...a good read.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Sarah

[Aubrai]

I smiled after I read it. Pretty short. Pretty.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you...

[Aubrai]

You're welcome!

[Fuzzy_Poluzah]

Beautiful. I loved it, each and every word. Brilliant.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you.....

[rhythm&blues]

Tragically stunning. One of my favorites of yours.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you R&B

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

absolute Perfection, you darling man - this is your greatest piece, I adore it! x

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Thomas

[dw817]

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Which is ?

[Baby Ricochet]

Read Request

[dw817]

Nono, you whispered her name ? What's her name ?

[Renée]

Beautiful Work, BR
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[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Rene

[Renée]

a pleasure Baby Ricoche ( ;

[ANTO]

I read somewhere that Senryus were meant to be spoken in one breath - this has loads of hidden depth BR. Nice one my friend

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you ANTO

[Marie]

A tragic love story sinished...

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you marie