My Last Breath Senryu

As I breathed my last
Before I faded away
I whispered her name

Reviews

[Nia Hope]

So few words with so much meaning I love it!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you ankara

[Keith]

Thats sad but beautifil. Sort of need to dwell on that for a while to soak up its implications.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Keith

[Zahra]

Beautiful senryu............ Well penned

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you voice

[Mark]

Good job on this one. New meaning to the phrase 'until my dying day'

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you mark

[Pryde Foltz]

I'm glad to see you've responded to other reviews. You had me worried there for a moment;) Nice to see you lay yourself vulnerable. It's a beautiful poem, and so it was well worth it.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you pryde

[Emna]

short but deep and meaningful nice

[Will]

Caught me off guard here, man. Didnt see that coming *subtly wipes tear from eye*. A really beautiful piece here, with such love and passion, I guess anything is really possible. Really wonderful work here.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you will

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

Hauntingly beautiful. Well done!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Sharon

[Angi]

True love. Don't make me sigh, Baby! Angi~

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you angi

[Rita L. Sev]

Wow. Impressive, emotional senryu. How beautiful to be so beloved... Very nice!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Rita

[Carolann Dowsett]

Could it possibly be love? Romantic and wistful.

[Baby Ricochet]

Could be....