Rain Tanka

Rain comes from on high
out of a broken spine sky
Black shrouded masses
As the world turned to ashes
When I made an angel cry

Reviews

[Emerald Seas]

I like this tanka surge lately. Some really thoughtful penning, as is this terrific poem. Well done, Mark!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you serah

[Annabelle Lee]

Woot woot. another good one

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Annabelle

[Will]

You paint a picture with your words here, Ricochet; stupendous imagery. Full of emotion and power. Well done

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Will

[Pryde Foltz]

You made an angel's cry
I hope she wept with love and passion
Because piss off an angel ...
you're in for one hell of a thrashin'

Seriously, beautiful poem of apology.

[Baby Ricochet]

Lol! Thank you pryde.

[Pryde Foltz]

Words of warning, my friend. Words of warning. lol Give that angel a kiss for me, will ya.

[ANTO]

Very powerful use of language BR - great imagery here - good one
Peace...

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you anto

[Nia Hope]

Awesome poem!! Keep up the good work :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you ankara

[Marie]

Very good imagry in this one. I never wrote a tanka, and am not sure what the form is. But I like this.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you marie

[Baby Ricochet]

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[Stella Armour]

very powerful, as to what could happen if we upset the angels.... wow, i like this.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Stella

[Steven]

Good stuff, R. Has real depth.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Steven. It's good to see you bro

[Rita L. Sev]

Very deep; as the world turns to ashes... due to our behavior, which would make the angels cry... Impressive, and well done with the Tanka form.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you rita