In Space, No One Can Hear You Scream

In Space, No One Can Hear You Scream

 

I tried to grasp all of space, entirely.
I past planets.
Galaxies.
Countless stars.
My brain could see nothing more beautiful.
Taking it all in.
I had seen the universe.
I started to cry.
I mean, how could one fathom like this?
I wanted to yell, scream and shout!
Nothing more beautiful.
Stupefied and wanting,
I needed more of course.
I tried to see beyond the outer edge.
The universe was only so big I assumed.
Because once I got so far, everything disappeared.
Wow…so nothing was beyond eh?
And that’s when I saw them. Yes I said them.
Two to be exact.
So that’s whats beyond the universe.
Eyes.
Not just any eyes.
Her eyes.

I began to melt-
As I started to realize
She embodies me.
What can I say? She’s my universe.

Reviews

[B.M. Song]

Wow... nice unexpected ending there! Beautifully written! I could almost envision you traveling in space beyond unseen galaxies and then you see her... wow!

[Gillzy]

This is too cute.

"Stupefied and wanting,
I needed more of course."

I think most people can identify with that feeling. Longing to be with something that is so magnificent, nothing can compare...

This girl you say does not exist... will be lucky when she does... hehe. :) Thank you x

[Fruit Loop]

Aw, that's so nice and cute. I liked it. You had a few errors if you wanted to know...nothing that would bug anyone..or at least not a lot.

Awesome work, Kyle ^-^

-Emily

[Matt Shutler]

DAMN
Seriously dude, that was amazing!
I don't know what you were talking about, that was SO good.
Seriously...
WOW
So much emotion and the ending is great. Very deep.

[Gabriela Rivas]

I already told you my thoughts on this.

It's not Butchered. It's beautiful.