This One Fits Just Right

i need to get together
all those guitar-strumming
love-you humming boys
who put their hats on the streets
and play for favors
because the quickest way to a girl's heart
is a sad, sweet voice
and an acoustic guitar
and i haven't seen mine in weeks
if you help me find it,
i just might let you keep it
i've noticed when i do good deeds
my teeth get brighter
but i'm so addicted to my vices
i'll just have to smile wider
cause i need the smoke to keep me calm
i need the caffeine to keep me awake
i need the liquor to put me to sleep
restless, i am a knee-bouncing fiend
i want to tear the world apart
in the grip of pearly incisors
your skin would taste so fine
but you're so far away
you say you'll be around to see me
but the bus takes far too long

it seems now 
as if i were dreaming
that weekend, 
all the pictures posed
models of people i ought to know
memories of you
tugged on at the edges of
by anxious, gnawing teeth
by those misplaced
-anxieties
my hair curls
because my fingers twirl
ceaselessly
goldilocks- not me, is me
i feel newer somehow
the aches and pains of my past
smoothed away
i am growing younger
the wisdom of a child
i see the world is full of wrong
but you seem full of right
and i guess i'm scared-
we've only shared
a few precious nights
short, brief and slight
i fear they will be swallowed up
by the ugly things outside

-and as i kissed you good-bye

i was horrified to find

you had taken my heart

away with you

you thief, you fiend

...i guess it's something i can let you keep

Reviews

[Emily Rae]

sobering yet playful at the same time

[Joiedevivre]

read it as a reader not a critic and all i can say is i loved it.

[smalltownsympathies]

YOU ARE A FANTASTIC POET.
You pulled me right in right from the get-go, sad and lyrical right till the last lines. I enjoyed this IMMENSELY, you are one talented soul. :)

[aloha.]

so, i thought this was absolutely amazing.
this is the kind of poetry i'm trying hard to get into. i want to learn to write a poem but it be like a story.
wish i could do this. nice job!

[GTVile]

I really like this. Something that I can relate to from the other side, but still something that leaves me feeling.

[deeps]

I love the first few lines of this, this is a wonderful write, I like this it was full of emotion.

[Lilly]

This was a great write. The beginning really stood out to me.
Really lovely work

[Aven]

I have never seen anything write like you, I love your style... also, I've only read two of your poems so far, but I recognize the theme of love and goodbyes... very interesting read, from a very good writer. :)

[Anicca]

This was an extraordinary read. I had many favourite bits including 'I need the caffeine to keep me awake, I need the liquor to send me to sleep' - visious circle that I can definately relate to, thanks for sharing.

[Frank F. Atanacio]

wow, simply loved it my goodness the raw energy in words were displayed here thank you for sharing this Frank :)