I am a long forgotten soul

A poem written by me, for CHAUCERIAN RONDEL ~ Blue Rose Cafe Challenge!. Please read the note by me,after reading this.

 

I am a very long forgotten soul,

I have nothing of which I can take pride,        

I am dwindling with my every stride.

 

I am having no path to stroll,

Every time I try to try, I am thrown aside,            

I am a long forgotten soul.

In my life there is nothing like a goal, 

There is not even He with me as my Guide.          

There is no one to whom I can abide.

I am a long forgotten soul.   

Author's Note

It is a Chaucerian Rondel. Written for the following contest:-

http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/CHAUCERIAN-RONDEL-~-Blue-Rose-Cafe-Challenge%21/51208/

Thanks to Helena Mam, who helped improve it.

As, always, be critical while reviewing.

I thank, Tate, for teaching me effective use of meter, which I have employed here.

(Image source:- Google)

http://www.flickr.com/photos/42305475@N03/10005876675

Reviews

[Confuser]

Devanshu: I liked your poem very much and would like to say Congratulations on a job well done. It is so very somber and deep, but the tone is straightforward, as if to say I am what I am. It's interesting, and the character of the long forgotten soul seems somewhat nonemotional as if to say; no one cares; I am lost, why should I care; there is no hope at all, no matter how hard I try. Thank you so very much. Great work. Dale

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for reading and reviewing. I am glad you like it.

Devanshu

[Confuser]

You're very welcome. I enjoyed it very much. Thank you! Dale

[Jeyanthi]

When we walk on HIS path, we might don't know where we will be taken.

Your lines shows that you are guided. :)

[Devanshu Rajput]

Well, this poem is not from my personal experience. It an attempt to convey the state, that a pessimist undergoes.

Thanks for reading and stopping by.

Devanshu

[Jeyanthi]

Its okay.
I can also understand that you have written this for fun. :)

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

I too feel that... lack of inspiration ...
relatable!! well done!!

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

lol I meant lack of inspiration in life!!! lol...
good onee!!!

[Jeyanthi]

Letting it know what you exactly mean. Am inspired. :P

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for the review Amulya.........That means a lot to me.....

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

hehehe!! I thought he might think that m calling his write lack of inspiration xD its always good to be clear with words!!
Devanshu... you are an amazing poet... I like the way you potray things.. most importantly...your plot choice is very good... you are a rising poet... n I know you'll rise to the great heights!!
Be blessed!!

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thank you for the kind words. I am grateful of your comment.

But, to be honest, I can not understand what Jeyanthi was trying to say, upon your review. And, Indeed! It is good to be clear with words.

Devanshu

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

lol even I didn't understood :P

[Jeyanthi]

I shouldn't have interrupted you guys in first place. Sorry!

[Devanshu Rajput]

no, problem, Jeyanhi.

Devanshu

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

Nah dear..its totally alright... ;)

[Deepika]

I can somehow relate to this writing..the urge to do something yet not receiving the proper kick off and the moral support and finally feel like a neglected soul.
Nicely expressed:)

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for reviewing mu piece and stopping by.I am glad you liked it.

Devanshu

[Country Girl46]

I sometimes feel the same way. I too, realized, I'm not alone for He is by my side, their to help guide, my way through life. Ty for sharing

[Devanshu Rajput]

Really thanks, for reviewing and stopping by. That means a lot to me.

Devanshu

[Country Girl46]

I am anxious to read more of you poetry.

[CA Anurag Sharma]

"only goal is my guide".... too good...brilliant read my friend

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks, for the review........

Devanshu