Shame

A sideways glace towards the floor,

A tilt of the head,

Eyes full of scorn,

Self-contempt.

A bite of the lip,

An excruciatingly slow deep breath,

A twist of the ring,

Regret.

Exhilarating rouge of the cheeks,

A pull at a lock of hair,

A twitch of the brow,

Distress.

 

Free yourself from your web of lies.

You don’t want to live your life in constant denies.

 

Reviews

[Inspiring Writer]

Free yourself from your web of lies.
You don’t want to live your life in constant denies.

Above one these lines' conveyed a great msg to us.. well written poem. I liked this poem. I was making some characters of your this poem where i am touching her hair and she's twisting her lips and looking at me and feeling so Exotic... HAHAH :)

Nice write.

[dianalondon]

Thank you very much! I am so happy you liked this poem!

[Lisa Victoria]

Great use of imagery to show how shame makes us feel...
I love the last two lines....so gripping and so true. Well done!

[dianalondon]

Thank you Lisa! I am happy you liked this!

[Coyote Poetry]

You did a amazing job making the word "Shame" have reason and purpose. The strong description brought to life the emotions and fear of the truth. No weakness in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[dianalondon]

Thank you so much Coyote for the great review! I am looking forward to reading your poetry as well :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Now... this one has life... the lines flow and the message gets across the reader... I would fix the last line... seems your telling them in steady of giving them a choice in the ending:

You don’t want to live your life in constant denies.
Don’t try to live your life in constant denial.

[dianalondon]

Thank you very much for your review, I appreciate your comments. :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...

[V]

A distinct but interesting imagery of shame you created in this one. I like this pretty modern (and even kind of experimental) way of writing and the use of words.

[dianalondon]

Thank you very much for this review, yes I was trying out a new, in a way unconventional format in this poem.

[Ravyne Hawke]

You did a wonderful job showing Shame. I enjoyed the imagery you created to highlight that shame. My only suggestion.. "denies" seems out of place at the end.. "denial" sounds better and flows better. Great work here, dianalondon.

[dianalondon]

Thank you very much for your suggestion! I am glad you enjoyed it as well :)