Forbidden Fruit

With burning passion her loins were yearning;

For his red lips, soft kisses giving,

For his hands, with tender lust grabbing.

Restless savages, forever hungry for an unfulfilled desire.

 

There comes a point in temptation,

When the want overtakes the guilt.

The hedonism prevails the righteousness,

And unfaithful feels more like fulfillment

 

With a pheromonal urge of pure desire,

She accepted his brazen approach.

Their eyes, lips and limbs entwined.

She took a bite of the forbidden fruit. 

Reviews

[Amy Penfold]

I love the flow of the emotions and build up to a poignant ending. It reminded me of Jane Eyre which is a very passionate relationship between her and Rochester. I say this connection simply because she is very moral and knows that his status is above her but they recognise each other as equals. Instincts are sometimes uncontrollable.
This was very beautiful, well done!

[dianalondon]

I love the connection you made there, as I love Bronte's Jane Eyre! Thank you for the compliment andI am glad that you enjoyed reading this.

[wordwarrior]

Yup this is very raw and passionate and beautifully penned. You wrote about those instincts we have that can override all else and wrote it with style. Bravo!

[dianalondon]

Yes, you have described my intent perfectly spot on. Thank you very much for your flattering review :)

[AmandaN]

I so 'get' this. You could have penned it for me! Raw,passionate but matter of fact. Excellent,thanks!

[dianalondon]

Thank you very much Amanda! Im really happy that you can relate to this. :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Ohhhh what an urgency in your words....incredibly passionate and filled with desire. Sometimes the forbidden is just what a person needs! Guilt takes a back seat and the only thing that matters is that second....that moment....and the two people involved. I liked this one a lot. Lydi**

[dianalondon]

Thank you so much for your review Lydia. I am really glad you liked this. Yes its exactly that, the thrill of doing the forbidden, its brings excitement back into life.

[SyberRose]

Enjoyed reading...nicely done in describing the taste of forbidden fruit and passion...Rose

[dianalondon]

Thank you very much Rose! I am really glad you liked this piece.

[Lisa Victoria]

Wow!! You nailed it.....a powerful piece of raw desire. I really love this part....
"There comes a point in temptation,
When the want overtakes the guilt"
You described that moment perfectly with just a few words.....Wonderfully done! Now i need a cold shower...lol:)

[dianalondon]

Hahah! Thank you very much Lisa, glad you liked it. Its my first poem were the content is of a more risqué genre than my usual work :)

[Muse]

Ooo la la. That was a risk worth taking. Raw,powerful,dark, mysterious & hot. Love the picture you posted of George Harrison with his wife Pattie Boyd. The only criticism to make this poem more perfect would be the image of Pattie Boyd with Eric Clapton while she was married to George Harrison. Job well done, keep writing.

[dianalondon]

Thank you very much, I'm really glad you liked the poem! And that's a brilliant idea btw, I will follow your advise and find a nice picture of Pattie and Clapton.