Is this a Dream

i wrote this poem when i was sixteen

I feel your dreams elude me.

Across the sea they pursue me.

 

I can not escape them,

 

for it was fatethat we make them. 

 

So i drown in your sea of fantasies,

 

and doubt my hopes and insanity.

 

I wallow in your illusions of life without protrusions

 

for I live in a world of dreams,

 

and I hope that it is all that it seems,

 

for a dream without you is a dream that is untrue

 

and a night of abandoned sleep.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[After Midnight]

I liked it. It lost its flow in the middle but I liked the emotion behind the words.

[DonGilbert]

very sweet.

[Vampstyle]

This is a very sweet poem. I love the imagery.

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If I was going to compare this to the things I have already got a chance to read. Its not bad, this poem is worth all the time there is to read it, very stimulus, and entertaining. Good job! Besides I like it...

[* Mourning Starr *]

A really nicely written piece .............You were a great writer 16 years ago too.......I loved this ...I have had dreams that I wish were real.....Great job....

[Shadkim]

I really like this. Dreams are always interesting things to write about. I like the idea of someone living within dreams, praying for it all to be real. The imagery is wonderful and the poem is nice and tightly written. No words wasted. Very nice ^^