Dreamer's Thought

A delicate heart aiming
toward the higher dreams.
trying to fight
over a fickle mind.
the clearer the visions are,
easier for the blurred mind can
try to win.
the energy of consciousness must
overcome the laziness of the mind.

Reviews

[Vishal Suthar]

Exactly, It's not we who are lazy but our Minds that compel us to stay dormant..

[Saddam]

try to win.
the energy of consciousness must
overcome the laziness of the mind.

Well said, and effective thought.
I like the idea.

[Kai Joy]

I think the length is perfect, very concise. The wording is kind of confusing in parts (like the blurred mind line) but I think overall this is a solid poem. Really like the last two lines.

[CA Anurag Sharma]

"the energy of consciousness must
overcome the laziness of the mind"....
Very well said.... short and sweet...good one...

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree and I liked your thoughts. We must go forward for dreams even when we don't want to. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote