On the Train to Hallstatt

rain, slick and dark,

lines the neuron pathways

of detached meaning

sheeting

electrical messages

disguised as love’s harbingers

of quickened heart

pulse apace

 

within the blink of an eye

the moistening of tongue

the flutter of lash

unspoken

 

you turn

and the light falls

unfettered

love’s joy

in the moment

copyright/all rights reserved Audrey Howitt 2012

Reviews

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

love's joy in the moment.......how joyful the moments were as I read this wonderful piece. Well done.

[Audrey Howitt]

Thank you Neva!

[emmajoy]

'.. disguised as love’s harbingers ~ of quickened heart ~ pulse apace..'

Certainly seems to be an electrically charged set of emotions, quick fire, tied in a brief space and time. The word 'urgent' comes to mind. Maybe i should come back and read again; tis intense, need to ponder more

[Audrey Howitt]

Thank you Emma--yes perhaps intense

[Tina Kline]

Very impressive and unique. It has a powerful impact and a good one at that. I really like this.

[Audrey Howitt]

Thank you TinaK!!!

[FJ Davis]

Not only a pleasure to read, Audrey, a pleasure to contemplate!

[Audrey Howitt]

Thanks Frank! Hope all is well in your world

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I really like that last stanza. Nice write.

[Audrey Howitt]

Thank you Victoria!!!

[SkinlessFrank]

if only it lasted a bit longer.....powerful jolt from this one Audrey

[Audrey Howitt]

I keep thinking I should learn to write longer--thank you Frank!

[SkinlessFrank]

actually i was thinking of that moment you refer to....i like the poem's length just as it is

[Audrey Howitt]

ah-got it--maybe I should learn to notice longer?