Poem 2-10

To dodge fate

make them wait

they who forsake

loss of their take

 

free to create

timed to restate

cause of the wake

thrown at the lake

 

never to late

for released gate

current thoughts ache

for the vision's opaque

 

lost old mandate

refused abrogate

for when virtue's fake

only fools partake

 

loathe will abate

justice equate

pious will break

and honour their stake

 

Reviews

[Katie Flores]

I love what you presented, its a great thought, but the only thing is that the earlier lines aren't very... together. They each have their own little thing going on. I don't know if that's what you wanted, but if they were a little more together it would make the read smoother.