Poem 2-53

Sad, don't bother unless dark in mood

How do they measure

One’s value until dead

Longings, achievements and ire

Once placed upon your head

 

Does some semblance

Of this life’s worth

Suddenly manifest and balance

The transgress of this earth

 

They may reminisce

Of that now forgotten

Opportunities they missed and forgive

Bourne heavy on that now rotting

 

And at last, they seize

Now consequence cast in stone

And watch to see who`s eye tears

In the epiphany of being alone

 

Reviews

[Touché Armada]

So sad, we should do holidays together one day, I dont like to travel alone so much these days.
Dark moods all round it would seem, must be that time of year or something.. Though I have to say that writing aside mines not so much dark but rather annoyed.. I must be somewhat of a spoiled brat after all, I cant stand it when anything is not as I want.

[April Child]

OK yes its sombre but I think well written. Sometimes it feels like this I guess, that we measure against the things we didn't do or say and who cries for us when we are gone. I don't think we are defined but what we did or didnt do, I think what defines us is how we move on from those times. I like to think so anyway :)

Only suggestion I can make here is to lose the capitals at the beginning of each line, you don't need them.

Nice poem.

[SM Davis]

Does some semblance
Of this life's worth
Suddenly manifest and balance
The transgress of this earth

I believe the answer is YES. I enjoyed this one! Very well done!

[Tania Leigh]

"Ya don't know what ya got 'til it's gone"

Sad, but true....we don't sometimes, whether it's family, friends, or celebrities.

I like this poem because it made me stop and reflect on a few people :-)
Thank you!