Ring Around...

lines were stuck in my mind during science and so i took the time to see where it would go

Ring around the rosy
        Rose colored glasses
        making everything look oaky
Pocket full of posies
        flowers to sway my judgment
Ashes, ashes
       my heart is plagued by love
We all fall down
       on a bed that later I will regret.

Author's Note

thank you for taking the time to read this, now if you would take just a few moments to review it and help me get better i would apreciate it =)

Reviews

[Nicole Clarice Anna Wie..]

Hmmm... i'm not one for nursery rhymes - although i am a mom - strange isn't it. I am a bit puzzled by this. I think to get the final feel this one requires a read through more than once.
Ok - so after reading this 5 times plus - i have come to the conclusion that i am not in love with it. Although I am in awe by the last 2 lines. I think that they are the power of the poem. But i do not see a strong enough connection to the final line throughout the rest of this. It is quite confusing to me. But maybe this is your style and other's might understand and apreciate it more than i.
I almost have the urge to take those last lines and start a poem with them. so this i suggest to u.

I will read more from u and hopefully will find the beauty in your work for i believe there is beauty in all poetry

PS: welcome to the cafe

[CLUTZ]

very good. interesting, and i would have never thought to right something like that.