Come on everyone [8-18-08]

Following the crowd. {Drugs}

Come on everyone, lets waste our lives away
So wasted you can't focus, on what I have to say
Breezy free, can't see what goes on in front of your face
Blessed with free will to slowly take your own rights away.
Take it or leave it, don't play around with death
It's your weaknesses holding you back

Just push away your failures, relax, and take a breath.
Come on everyone, lets have some fun

We'll all be dead before the games are done.
Smoke it, shoot it, stick it in your vein,
Look at all the happy people, like they're the ones insane.
Come on everyone, lets dance around like fools
Drunken, crazy, high on drugs, Breaking all the rules.
Grow it, sell it, pick it up and go
Take it, fake it, lies are all you know.
                         
 

Author's Note

Let me know if you think I should go on. I can stretch this out forever.
Critiques accepted.

Reviews

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

HELL YES AWESOME FRIGGIN POEM!!!
I love this piece so much.
I can relate to it because of how many people I've watched destroy themselves with crap!!
I love the subject & your rhyming & flow are both perfect!!!
You did such a wonderful Job on this piece!
I heart u!! =]

p.s.
I had to re-write this review because something happend to my pc when I was on this poem & it got deleted...sorry.

In its length it is perfect, do not add more.

I love the message here, and I love your form. You have great fundamentals in your piece and your emotions and message are well discussed.

I would say this is one of the best pieces here :)