loveis.

 

 

 

Let

the

unpalatable meatloaf

be a testament to

good sandwich making.

What was both

enervate and untamed,

I solved

with mayo

and two professed

slices of

whole wheat bread.

That is was delicious

breaks my heart

and I sat grief

stricken at the thought

that to please

you would try

so hard.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Meatloaf is so good the first time...and then still works so well as leftovers for sandwiches...

perhaps as a relationship...we learn from the first time, when love is the entree---

there is that comfortable, passion filled taste...
but then, it might end...
and yet resume in its leftover state...tries again to please...
delicious can break a heart, but also put it back together, like a really well made sandwich..

made with love? it sates the stomach, and also the heart.

[JC]

I need to get further in your head or get a time machine that also turns me into a fly on the wall to grasp everything being said here...but it provokes thought and will mean something to me in some way in my own life.

[Ed Hart]

hilarious...how many sandwiches did i eat because i loved (lusted) her...mayo is the magic medium

[W.k.kortas]

Sometimes, the simplest gesture is the grandest of all, our own Little Drummer Boy moments. This strikes me as a bit different from your normal work--there is an unusual economy of language. This is, I wish to stress, simply an observation. There is no room nor need for criticism here.

[Tree]

A smooth thin spread of humor, with a couple of dabs of cynicism. I had to smile wide after reading this piece, but at the same time it was a little sad. Discussing the effects of music on the psyche I mentioned to C that I spent all day yesterday listening to a song by Lynyrd Skynyrd called, Simple Man. its message of keeping it simple, resonates. A lot like this poem, the better most satisfying things we come across are born in simplicity.

A well contructed piece, d. A great example of keeping it simple.

Diego

[writing mojo]

ahh..yes the appetite for gratification is an encrustation that can lead to crabby posture from slaving out of a shell...excellent piece