fatuous

When my daughter was born

they handed me the silver scissors

to snip the cord that dragged you here.

Timid, I was, as if the make-believe mountain I had passed

had climbed upon me; threw it's largest rocks

at me. Held me seated in the lost train

thru it's tunnel. I was frightened. My hands

still shake when I think of trains and rail cars

filled with others lives. Some going to the same

place every day.

As if every day is the thing eternity

asks you to cut

thru.

Reviews

[Zoe Naga]

Love this! Its so beautiful. Its so refreshing and so real! Thank you for the awesome read!

[h d e rushin]

thank you Zoe Naga (love that name) for those kind remarks......dana

[Terpsichore]

Impossible to 'snip' that cord and those rocks are no more than pebbles we occasionally stub our toe on.

Fatuous this 'aint, a beautiful love poem it surely is to my mind.

Always you stir the senses. T

[h d e rushin]

thank you dear friend....dana

[Beccy]

I'm not sure precisely why, but an all pervading sadness came over me as I read this poem. It's somehow different from how you often write, yet still as intensely powerful intellectually. Those damned 'scissors' will have their way no matter what, and gradually snip through the ties that bind, in the same way that time becomes almost a enemy; the greatest thief of all if you will. Yet still, like all those other lives, we journey on, knowing that what we bring to and into this flawed world will ever outlast the mere physical.

Truly, this is a poem that has left a lasting impression on me.

Beccy.

[h d e rushin]

thanks Beccy. These words I will carry with me all day....I always appreciate you stopping in....dana

[HippieSoulPunx]

"As if every day is the thing eternity asks you to cut through," whoa, what an ending. Powerful. X. Silver put what I love about your style into the perfect words. You take these deep, intricate, intelligent ideas or thoughts, and you express them through simple concepts. Not simple as in there's no depth, but simple as in they're things that ordinary people can relate to on the surface, and that allows them to dig deeper and get to the extraordinary levels of the beautiful things you've created.

[h d e rushin]

thank you HippieSoulPunx for those words of inspiration my friend....dana

[m.s.early]

You've got a real talent for taking stream of conscious and manifesting them on a cognitive level. It's always impressive. You certainly give us enough to provoke our thoughts sufficiently.

[h d e rushin]

thanks x. for being who you are.........dana

[jacob erin-cilberto]

every day we cut the cord and try to exist on our own....we have to do it ourselves...they leave us, we leave them...and hope love and what we taught them holds strong enough so that the bond is never totally severed in the heart.

[h d e rushin]

so true Jacob...Wonderful words to start my day dear friend.....dana

[Ed Hart]

splendid, my dear...cockeyed and scattered, but splendid

[h d e rushin]

thanks Ed.....I love a cockeyed and scattered world........dana