Goodbye Redux

My friend Moon wanted to add to this, so this is a collaboration between her and I.

Back home from the funeral

everything the same as before

prescriptions needing refills

half a bottle of conditioner

her glass of water still full

the right bedside empty

where other people saw one grave

I saw two

Your perfume lingers

on my pillow side

Your hairbrush stands by your makeup

Your earrings are still inside

your box Angels whisper quite a lot  

I hear the leaves dance beside the window

I hear the birds whisper your name

I loved your heart from left to right

I wished a beautiful good night

Jesus came to take you

from pain I hear the birds

whisper your name

Author's Note

I love the good friends in my life and the gentle souls that cross my path......

Reviews

[MCS]

An outstanding piece of writing, beautiful in all its sorrow. Seeing the two graves left me without breath for a moment.

[Betty Hermelee]

I like the collaboration and I also like the way the poem is structured...two views perhaps on this scene... I believe it portrays much pain... sorrow; one see one grave, the other sees two; everything stays where is was....except an empty side of the bed....powerful and vivid...excellent writing!
Warmly, B

[Dave W.]

Thankyou so very much Betty, I will let Moon know your input.

[Betty Hermelee]

Sounds good, always a pleasure!
Warmly, B

[Costa Siwale]

Such a powerful piece, surreal!
I like this

[Dave W.]

Thankyou Costa, for the kind review.

[Ms claws]

Pain. Suffering. Not easily shared.
Your writings always leave me speechless.
They do help, David. Thank you.

[Dave W.]

As always you are most welcome, I hope things have been getting better for you.

[Ms claws]

@Dave W., Unlike you, I have the time to immerse myself in "other things". Right now, I'm studying Bukowski and trying to open myself up more. Venting helps the healing...as you very well practice in your beautiful writings. I better stop before I spiral into craziness...you know. Have a great one.

[Dave W.]

I wish my writings were beautiful, you have always been really kind, but I am still trying to improve so much, I am lacking something but I dont know what it is.

[Ms claws]

@Dave W. Just keep doing what you love. You lack nothing because it's all inside you. It will come when it's time.