Shadows Of The Mind

A poem I wrote a few years back. When you hallucinate, life is that much sharper, crisper, and painful to the senses, not always a good combination.

Want to read this in a different language ? Change the TO field to your own country after going HERE Press CTRL = (equals) to increase the page size and CTRL - (minus) to decrease the page size Shadows Of The Mind © February 2014 Written by David Wicker (Please do not reprint without permission) * * * This poem is Rated: EVERYONE   Within the recesses of the mind There dwells a darkness; hard to find. It fuels our emotions of love and hate Brings empathy, malice, and debate. Of whether it is either good or bad To temper our sorrow or make us glad. The gentle frame we call the human soul Has countless facets none can ever toll. We love, we live, we earnestly seek Tranquility, harmony, abundance in peak. For when two are bound within impassioned romance we traipse amongst the borogroves by starlight to dance. And when we lie still in our bed Dreaming the dreams of unconscious led. Solely by our friends both known and then The pattern of life starts over again ... Return back HOME   You are Earth Visitor #

Reviews

[redd Brick Keshner]

Reading it aloud gave it the best feel. It's such a wonderful poem to experience. And on the journey, the darkness is not felt but flows in fluid undulation like silk sheets rustling in the dark, a sort of dark liquid light, if that could be imagined. Thoroughly enjoyed. /Frederick.

[dw817]

Well thank you, Frederick. That is very kind of you. I wrote this prior to receiving medication. My brain is very sharp without it - but it can also be bad for me.

I'm glad you like it ...

[GPR]

Such an interesting poem to read. I loved the visualization. :D

[dw817]

Thank you, GPR. I wrote that poem years ago. I saved it originally as a .GIF because I was afraid it would get taken. But - it's all good friends and company here in Writer's Cafe so no worries. :)

I see you write poetry too - so that's where I'll be next.

[Blue]

"For when two are bound within impassioned romance
we traipse amongst the borogroves by starlight to dance."

*Sigh* Beautiful lines, David! The last line is utterly beautiful, too. I'm almost sorry your poem has ended.
You do well in poetry. :)

[dw817]

Poetry doesn't come easy for me though, Arzel. And writing is a bit of work as well. As it is, I've been writing code these past few days, experimenting with S3.

I'm happy you enjoy it. If I dig up any more poems from the past, I'll certainly let you know. :)

[N!LoC]

very nice poem.... !!!!!!!!!!!!!1

[dw817]

Glad you like it, N!loc. :)

[genocide]

this is very well written i like this

[dw817]

Good deal, Tormentor. BTW only members 18+ can visit your site. That means anyone not logged in won't be able to see it unless you change your profile back to normal.

You can individually rate your writings 18+ if you like.

[ferousfinite]

I liked the flow of the construct. I think this could be much longer to give you more time to gather the whole picture. Overall I feel like I hot the point. Please refer to this exam and take into heart what you are about to read and keep it there =) http://www.musesmuse.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=55837

[dw817]

I would rather be a clear light than a scintillating one, Elijah. AABB is the only style of poem I know. This limits me, but it keeps my poems tried and true.

[ferousfinite]

If a student walks the path of his teacher how far will he walk? Does he start where his teacher ends? If he takes a different path than his teacher, will he end where he began? how far then will he go? refer to writing with numbers: http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/ferousfinite/1240048/

[dw817]

I'll stick with AABB, although I noticed my Mom used ABAB format.
http://bit.ly/1mzYylB

[ferousfinite]

Try this: 5 words per line - 8 lines - single thought ending with a question. If you can do this, you can do anything! =D

[Pryde Foltz]

We love, we live, we earnestly seek
Tranquility, harmony, abundance in peak.
For when two are bound within impassioned romance
we traipse amongst the borogroves by starlight to dance

For someone who doesn't write poetry, David, you do it very well. Bravo.

[dw817]

Thanks Pryde. This was prior to being on medications. I do my best work when I'm crazy - not a good match I know. :/

[Daniel Dawes]

Really liked your poem. I found it thought provoking and similar to my own work. Thanks for sharing.

[dw817]

Nice to find a fellow poet. Welcome. I'll certainly take a look at your top work.

[kublakhan27]

Thoughtful and powerful words for sure...I would not have guessed that this was an old one...you certainly had the voice and vision of a poet already. You've summed up the human condition with incredible accuracy, compelling us to hold a mirror up to ourselves and make us wonder if we really want to believe in the notion that what we don't know won't hurt us. The rhymes and rhythms are spot-on as well, making it not only a fine poem in an artistic sense but a technical one as well. A great piece, nicely done :)

[dw817]

Good to hear from you Kublah. Wow, thanks for the praise ! :D You listen long enough to the voices, eventually poetry comes out. I'm better today, Sertraline really helps.

You mention in your profile you are Bipolar. Perhaps Sertraline might help you too ?

[kublakhan27]

You're very welcome :) I may try it sometime...I've tried pretty much everything else.

[dw817]

The trade-name is ZOLOFT. Talk to your doctor about it.