Sometimes

Sometimes,
I love you,
Sometimes,
I hate you,
Sometimes,
You bug me,
Sometimes,
You hate me,
Sometimes,
You cry to much,
Sometimes,
You bring me down,
Sometimes,
You hurt me,
Sometimes,
You treat me right,
Sometimes,
You treat me wrong,
Sometimes,
You feel bad,
Sometimes,
You feel used,
Sometimes,
You feel good,
Sometimes,
You feel hurt by others,
Sometimes
You feel unloved,
Sometimes,
You feel happy,
Sometimes,
You feel sad,
Sometimes,
You need to be hugged,
Sometimes,
You need to get smacked,
Sometimes,
You just need to feel loved.

Author's Note

Review please. Enjoy.

Reviews

[maryjaneuy]

very straight to the point, :)
there's a great flow.

[Analgesia]

I like this repetition of simple structure it adds a rythmic consistancy. It also adds a sort of snowball effect I think, but it's as if you've just turned away from the snowball before it hits the bottom of the hill, just before the climax. The use of repetition is like a preamble to a kind of rythmicly cathartic release and without it I just feel like it's missing something. Just let it out at the end without subtlety, describe on image, on instance of the impatus behind these feelings, without holding back. Then pause. Take a breath. And let the idea reach it's own conclusion. I know some of that was a little metaphysical but I geuss that's just the way I see poetry I apologize none the less. Thank you for writing something worth reading, I hope I was of some use.