Give Me One More Chance

This is based off a song. Jackson 5. And it is dedicated to my ex.

Give me one more chance, baby.
What have I ever done to you?
Why did you leave me?
Give me one more chance, darling.
To prove to myself that I love you.
Please give me on more chance, honey.
I promise if it doesn't work,
That you could leave again,
But please give me one more chance.

Author's Note

Reviews please. I would appreciate it.

Reviews

[PaperHearts]

Sweet write. The idea behind this piece was relatable, and very universal, and I liked the simple way in which you worded it. I liked the desperation and longing that this piece evoked, particularly in the rhetorical questions. There was just one error that I noticed, which was that 'on' should be 'one' in the fourth to last line. Other than that, a very solid write. Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[HorrorMaster]

Aww so beautiful I love it. :)

[maryjaneuy]

Everyone deserves a second chance, and I know you deserve it. I hope your ex can read this. very nice. :)

[Dream Catcher]

I liked it! I believe everyone deserves another chance and to right their wrongs. You did very good in capturing the feeling here in a short poem, excellent!

[JenLyn]

I agree with James, I like the same idea of "you can leave again but give me one more chance." Before I read description I was going to say that this should be a song. It's cute good job. Oh if you get the chance can you check out my new poem "Youthful Eyes" it's a little long but I'd really like to get some feedback on it. Thank you :)

[Thomas Fleet]

Ah, I like it. Jackson 5 is awesome, love their music. I like the whole idea of "you could leave again, but give me one more chance." I believe a lot of people deserve a chance, and some deserve another. I guess it depends on how much you love a person, huh? :]
Thanks for sharing.