Heavy

You're heavy,
Please get off me, 
All this weight,
Preventing me from breathing.

You're weight is killing me, 
My vision is starting to dissipate, 
My lungs aren't going to fill with air, 
Until I am let up. 

I need to breathe, 
So I can stay alive, 
Please just let me up, 
I can't take this pressure...

Reviews

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I felt a physical weight as I read this, good description, and a great poem.

[XinHyun]

really like this, there's so much weight on everyone

[Cassie Fraga]

mmmm, and pressure is what drives us crazy... I really like your style, u define what ur feeling so well and so simple... yet it packs a punch. **tips my lyrical wand to you** great read!!! =)

[Maria.F.T]

Ahahaha...it sounds funny. (y)

[Summer'sBreeze]

wow
deep
nice ^-^

[THIS ACCOUNT IS CLOSED]

Wow, this is deep. it can be taken metaphorically or litterally... I think it is well written. Good Job!

[Charile]

Ooooo I like it,

[Sucker Punch]

Nice