Why Love?

First poem. =/

People are always striving for love

Love is an emotion which isn't quite earned

Children are unknowingly comforted by it's embrace

Once it's gone, it can't always be returned

And for most people it is an endless race

It is felt by some from a god above

Others can't describe it, it is something they feel

It is treacherous, but it can also be as pure as a dove

But for me... I only wish that it could be real

It shatters worlds, It breaks hearts

It makes us stumble and fall

But for a lucky few it lands like a dart...

We know what love is, but why is it felt at all?

...

I can't answer that. I can't do that math

All I know is that It's an adventure in which we all partake

I'm on mine now and I must have forgotten the map

I see her, I just can't find the path.

 

Author's Note

Please give constructive criticism. As you may know, I lack confidence.

Reviews

[Devons]

This is really skillful, neat and has a lovely flowing rhyming scheme that works right down to practically every syllable. The subject of the poem might not be new (obviously, it's love!) but the way in which the sentiment is conveyed, and the tender longing that comes with it is beautifully put across. Good work.

[FeliciaS (Poetic Prince..]

Searching for love, I understand this all to well. Good job.

[Jason Ellis]

You may lack confidence, but you certainly do not lack skill.
I'm glad you took the time to write this, and even more glad you took the time to put it here.
As previous reviewers have said, the subject is not new.
Yet, it's always a subject that people are willing to read about.
I've known people who hated poetry, but when they read about love, they instantly fell in love with the poem.
Well, I enjoy reading poetry, and I enjoy reading about love. Your feelings were portrayed quite well in this writing. As this is the first of your poems I have read, I can't wait to read more (:
Excellent job.

[mcg03002]

It's funny how so many of the greatest writers have expressed a lack of confidence in their abilities. Did you ever read "Where the Red Fern Grows"? It's one of my favorite books. When you get a chance, google the author of that book. His name's Wilson Rawls. He was a person who felt that he had great stories to tell...but lacked the writing ability to ever be recognized. Eventually he just gave in to the urge to write, and became one of the most noted American authors ever.
You have great talent. This piece is wonderful. Millions upon millions of works have been written about love. That's because every person experiences it a different way and, until we understand the emotion fully (which will never happen) there can never be enough words penned in attempts to define it.
Your poem is tender, descriptive, and gorgeous. Great job. I look forward to reading more.

[Sasha]

Well, like everyone else has already told you 60 times, this is a beautiful poem and you shouldn't lack confidence because it's really good. I empathize which made me like it a bit more.

[A.Lee]

I really enjoyed this piece. As Devons said, its a common subject but you wrote it in a very uncommon way. Its not sappy or tragic, just thoughtful. I think you did well with your rhyme scheme as well. Nice work.

[MissWordSmith]

this was just lovely. The rhyming scheme was perfect and the flow was great.
though the poem was really good overall, the last stanza was a bit of a downer.
keep it up! keep writing! that's how we all get better :)

[deeps]

I like it the way it is.
This is wonderful. I found it beuatiful really.

[Truly Ross-Wisehart]

This was very good. Nice rhythm and flow. I do agree that there are some uneccessary words in the last stanza that make it a tad awkward, but aside from that it is a very good write.

"for a lucky few it lands like a dart..." Wonderful line! Keep at it. You are doing fine!

~True

[TTBoy28]

Hey, Dylan! Children do know when they are loved. They just do things to be loved always. I think the last stanza is a little too wordy. To admit that you "lack confidence" is just the beginning to wanting to be a good or even great writer. Thanks for sharing. Keep it up. Good Job!

[Vartul]

Hmmm.Wonderful! A rhythm would've helped, but i'm not complaining.And forget that rubbish about self-confidence.All good writers have fantastic self confidence,and so should you.I love the ending.