Plane Crash

This one isn't good, and I know it, but I still like it. It's about a person on a plane, on the way to see the person they love, who lives far, far away. Meanwhile, the person they're with is planning to break up with them. Black is from the plane.

 

Prepare for liftoff

We're good together

 

Flying smooth

It's working out

 

 

 

There's a problem

I don't love you anymore

 

Contacting the tower

Thinking it over

 

Deploy oxygen masks

You're suffocating me

 

We're going down

I'm ending this

 

Prepare for impact

This is over

 

Crash landing

No survivors

 

Postcard from a plane crash

Wish you were here.

Author's Note

The reason it doesn't say black is the plane staff is because it isn't, really. Not at the end anyway. So, I've changed it to the plane in general. Which could, potentially, be confusing, but I hope not. xD

Reviews

[fireblossom]

Great idea. Well written. Love it.

[FuMiko]

I like it, too. Just the simplicity of it makes it very powerful. Also, it's length makes it easy to read, I think I've read it three times, now? It's good, find a contest for it.

But in your description I think you got it mixed up, wouldn't red be the person? Black seems like plane-staff.