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If I am there,

   against the glass--

   on the other side of

   the crooked mirror on the wall

   (crooked because I hung it myself),

 

then who is here,

   cross-legged and delicately

   tasting words she learned

   beneath invisible stars

   (invisible because she drew them herself)?

 

Same freckle, cross-stitch

of veins, yet our eyes

meet--my eyes,

and the warmth retreats

from my pulse.

 

My lungs are pinned like

moth-wings inside of my

chest, contained from

dust and safe from rust.

 

But my moth is not yet dead--

it is center gravity

and it steers me, gently, to the light.

Reviews

[Androglossia]

I like this, actually I liked everything you write. It's like abstractness burried deep within abstractness yet not far from understanding. Your work reflects how great you are. As of the poem, it centers on your wavering but undying passion.Thank you for sharing.

[eglantine]

thank you very much Maryanne :)

[.]

I really like this, Eglantine. Your raw imagery and emotions ALSO centers your audience to the light of your meaning. See what I did there? Great work.

[eglantine]

lol yes, i see what you did there. Thanks for reading :)

[That_Girl]

Like all of your poems, this is different (in a great way) and written exceptionally. Amazing!

[eglantine]

thanks :)

[MachinaWriter]

This is good. The last line of this probably one of the best I've read in a very long time. Thanks for sharing this. Its unorthodox, but its unique because of this. I especially liked the parts in parentheses in the first two stanzas. All around a great poem. The structure was good. Though, I'd say I wasn't as much a fan of the third stanza as I was the others. The last two were great though. Again, thanks for letting us read this ^^

[eglantine]

haha, i'm flattered you called my writing unorthodox. Thanks for reading and reviewing :)

[MachinaWriter]

lol no problem ^^ I've posted up a book that's a compilation of poems about my life. If you get the time, I'd love for you to read some of it and let me know what you think. Its called A Tragic Life.

[eglantine]

sure thing! send me a read request?

[MachinaWriter]

I already did, I'm sure. It won't let me send another lol

[eglantine]

oh lol

[MachinaWriter]

I miss those things all the time lol Usually its better if people just send me a message if they want me to read things, other wise I won't notice its up until I decide to search through their profile page for new stuff lol But I do that pretty regularly so its usually fine ^^

[eglantine]

oh, i see how i missed it. i explained in the review

[Belinda]

Its a confusing read. I enjoyed some of the word play though.

[eglantine]

yea, my writing is currently just jig-sawing foreplay and I'm hating it currently lol