Dark muse

There lies the tip,
dark and feathered--
morose and gangrened,
just below your Hell-carved tongue.

Its sinews are draped
with blackened flames
that burn and curl around
your prickled nerves.

Its charred roots coil
around your blistered heart,
tightening your breath
into steam--into speech

for this is the sharp quill of night
and ink the blood of dreams in flight.

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

I can never go wrong opening one of your poems... you always strike so deep into the heart and soul... And here is the whisper we have all heard in the night.. the flush of inspiration that seems maddening... a music so darkly played.. so unforgettable...

[That_Guy]

Fantastic job. Dark and wicked yet so enticing, well done

[eglantine]

thanks :D

[Emily B]

master-full

[eglantine]

Thanks Emily

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

Why so dark, art thou reading Plath?

[eglantine]

she is my favorite

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

Then this all makes terrific sense then doesn't it :P

[eglantine]

quite so lol

[Uroš D. Stojanov..]

Really nice poem, keep at the good work....

[eglantine]

thanks Urosh :)

[Aaron]

It seems like I'm never disappointed after reading your work.

Harsh. Is the first word that comes to my mind.

The mere act of speaking this poem leads my mouth down a precarious path.
Your word choice maintains an amazing consistency.
The images accentuate it.

A critical comment to even out the barrage of compliments:
I'm jealous.
Wait... I guess that's hardly critical.

Thanks for sharing!

[That_Girl]

Hell-carved tongue - very nice....

As always, your work stands out. Your style is fantastic. Well done. :)

[eglantine]

thanks for reading and commenting :)

[Leslie Philibert]

I like this, a poem with compact, considered imagery, that stays on its theme and presents loads of strong images, good work.

[eglantine]

thank you Leslie

[Steven]

A little free flow sonnet. I like it-- it pounds my eyes down the lines. My only snag is morose--seems too personified, as an emotional state--I think keeping the metaphor pure in non-emotive descriptions best. But I still want to lick the t's ;).

[eglantine]

yes, that is what i was striving for. Morose... yea I was on the fence with that.

[quinfinn]

each time i read on of your poems i am again delighted and surprised at your grasp of the human psyche. you seem to know how to bewitch us with your words. i am never disappointed!

[eglantine]

thanks quinfinn :)

[Allycat]

I love your writing style, it's incredibly unique and wonderful
Excellent job as always, I really loved reading this piece

[eglantine]

good, i'm glad you enjoyed it