Thoughts

there is something delicate
about a moths' wing under
microscope light,

like flossing a heartbeat between
                              your teeth.

little moth, little moth,
           I weep for you

with tears untouched by sun or hand.

trade bodies with me:
        learn to speak with fingers

and I'll crawl, one-winged,
off the window sill.

Author's Note

I've been MIA.... just not doing well.

Reviews

[Nix]

A quietly profound poem. To be able to write such a profound and emotional poem in such few words is an accomplishment. AMAZING. It's not melodramatic or over sentimental, it's perfect. "like flossing a heartbeat between your teeth." What an amazing line. Great poem, one of my favorites I've seen on WC.

[eglantine]

aw, you flatter me, thanks for reading and I am glad you enjoyed it.

[Richard]

this is adorable ... you're a very sensitive lovely thing I must tell you :)
I DO appreciate a good moth poem

[eglantine]

thanks for reading

[Richard]

cheers

[Hayley]

"Art never comes from happiness."

This is fragile, delicate, beautiful, and vulnerable. The last two lines are perfect.
The mood of the poem is set from the beginning and doesn't disappoint or waver.
You never disappoint me, either... Dare I say I feel I am quite similar to you?
I hope you do better, better than me as of late :) Always look forward to more writing from you.
Best wishes.

[eglantine]

haha, yes, I feel we write similar as well. Thank you

[Emily B]

i wonder what human tears would do to a moth wing . . . there would be damage i imagine . . .

[eglantine]

Thanks for reading

[Frieda P]

Deep and brooding, this made the sides of my mouth go down.

like flossing a heartbeat between
your teeth.

Brilliant line!

[eglantine]

merci

[Frieda P]

Always my pleasure reading your thoughts...

[Jack...]

Very deep my friend and very touching. Hope you get your wings back soon.

[eglantine]

thank you Jack...

[beautiful dreamer]

very beautiful. i hope you get to feeling better. you too good of a person to be brought down like this for too long.

[eglantine]

aw well thanks! I hope I mend soon as well.

[beautiful dreamer]

heres a hugs for a headstart *hug*

[eglantine]

:)

[beautiful dreamer]

:) i'm here for yah girly!

[ChemicalMadness]

this was delicately beautiful. loved the lines:
like flossing a heartbeat between your teeth
with tears untouched by sun or hand

dark places under intense inspection can often yield beautiful things. i really enjoyed this piece.
CM.

[eglantine]

Thank you as always Chemical

[Leslie Philibert]

When I see the name of this poet I look right away, because I like good poetry, and find it here..original, perfectly weighed, I am gradually running out of words to describe this,
which is simply magnificent..read it.

[eglantine]

You are too kind. Thank you for reading