a sexual discovery

I fractured the moon and drank
its secret milk the night
I first saw my naked self
in my mother's full-length mirror:

        pale and dark-eyed,
        whispered light,
        white pinpoint pupil,
        tethered and star-bright.

Ribs are for counting,
a spine for arching
and lips for peeling
my name from your tongue.

Author's Note

libido awakened, the realization of sexual power.

Reviews

[Dana Alsamsam]

this piece hit me like a little piece of mint on my tongue! all of the senses are beautifully awakened in this one moment of powerful and almost haunting realization. the woman body is in fact a powerful thing.

the ending leaves a beautiful longing and hunger for exploration. great work!

[eglantine]

Merci! I'm glad you enjoyed it

[Dinesh Sairam]

The middle stanza sounds a bit off. But the last stanza rounds off the piece quite well.

"and lips for peeling
my name from your tongue."

I prefer poetry like this, simple and usual. In what I've read so far, most poetry of this topic are a cliche of "seduction for dummies" Q&As. So, kudos on that. I'd also recommend you to read "Fragment" by FS Flint, since this piece reminded me of that.

Keep writing.

[eglantine]

Thank you as always

[SquinklaPsyOps]

This is the part I don't get "I fractured the moon and drank
its secret milk the night" from the rest of the poem, could you please explain it to me.

[eglantine]

the speaker drank the milk the night they first saw themselves naked with enlightened vision.

[Pete Langley]

A beautiful sensual image of awakening realisation, Eglantine. P.

[beautiful dreamer]

nicely done girly very well written

[Hayley]

AMAZING. so perfect. you are perfect!

[eglantine]

hahaha I am far from perfect, but thank you

[~Beautiful Dreamer~]

My mouth dropped open like "whoah" I like this!

[eglantine]

haha, that made me smile, thanks for reading!

[Simon Welsh]

Love it. Very tender and fragile.