Mute by choice

 

there are no words in my mouth

 

they are in the back of my skull,

 

near my ears;

   

    only I can hear her voice,

 

                            (our voice)

 

the voice polished with beetle-night

and grey shower steam--

   it claws and my jaw clenches, trapping it.

 

this voice does not belong

out there, in front of my lips--

 

it would tear stars from the sky.

Author's Note

In the last line: "stars from the sky" or "hearts from the sky"

Reviews

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlande..]

this is f*****g great danielle..I like that you're so respectful of this power..and those stars might have planets with humanoids like ours, so good call..but maybe you should have a conversation with your voice and be like, yo, voice, you're pretty awesome, maybe we can peek into the light of day one of these times after exploring the sunken city in the mediterranean...you guys can have a margarita together on the beach next to some interesting greeks and/or geeks..if it gets to be too much just share a hug and an understanding glance into each other's eyes and then go for a relaxing swim..I'm sure it's pretentious of me to expand on your poem with such a tangent, but I'm just loving my neighbor as myself, even though i'm obviously not a mermaid..i'd sink like a stone in an ocean or lake like a statue...this poem really resonated and it's got your usual brilliance..i think I've probly already touched on your literary style technique accoutrements enough so i'll just finish by saying well done! bongo spazz, out!!

[eglantine]

Thank you very much :)

[quinfinn]

i think you could use both in the same line, think about it..."the hearts from the stars" leave "sky" out of it...just my suggestion...lovely write, indeed!

[eglantine]

ooooo, I like that, a lot, thanks! :)

[K. Louis]

I love how concise this is..."beetle-night and grey shower steam" ...and the thought of words tearing stars from the sky...I swear that's what they do sometimes. Very well done!

[eglantine]

Thank you for reading!

[Pete Langley]

We all have a demon deep-hidden, sometimes hard-held, sometimes trying to escape with a scream....mine has a very bad singing voice!!! ( I was banned from singing in school assembly!) ...sorry, love...being frivolous! This is about frustration, I think. P.

[eglantine]

hahahaha! I didn't know that was possible! I love singing as well, but I've never been banned lol

[Justaguy]

I like stars. Nicely done! I like this one a lot!