Sangria stars

I sit here,

            cat on my lap,

            an evergreen forest in my lungs

                                    and silver fish in my heart.

 

Your blue eyes are beneath these typewriter keys,

                                    behind every sheet of paper.

 

“I will always find you,” you whispered as our stars ripped apart.

 

 

And you did,

 

                        on a May night warm with sangria and bonfire:

                                    we made eye contact

                                    and our souls crashed

 

                                    into each other

 

                                    like wave against wave,

 

                                    starlight against starlight.

Author's Note

Title suggestions? I'm stuck...

Reviews

[G!o]

This is beautiful. Is there a better word to say that? The imagery is a 5/5. When i began reading it, i was like (an eyebrow rose) but the second line, grabbed me by the throat and i was gasping for more and more of what's coming next. I love every sentence and the perfection in it.

[Amberlight]

Love the poetic formatting or whatever the official name is. I must try that sometime."Your blue eyes are . . . behind every sheet of paper." love it.

[Great Aunt Astri]

It is funny how life has a way of working out. Your poem is very poignant and I am so glad that your souls crashed into each other!

[Ashwin Thakur]

If u can just use more rhymes and lenghten ur work and just some more words it will create mesmerizing effects and the title can be anything because ur choice of words in the poem are different from others
And surely better

[eglantine]

Thanks for the suggestions but I'm not really the rhyming kind of poet.

[Ashwin Thakur]

You are always welcome you can also read some of my poems

[MAC]

The title is perfect and very cool sounding. The poem is well crafted and comes off as very professional. There are also some amazing lines in it. Read it twice, once out loud...tis flawless! If it were voted upon you would have my vote for Laureate.

[eglantine]

aw why thank you Mark! I appreciate it. I actually have not read it out loud yet... surprisingly. Now I have to!

[MAC]

smiling...you really must. try having someone else read it to you. has a tad of surprise to it.

[Simon Welsh]

This is well written. The title is fine; just made a note of all fancy/vaguely related words and use them when appropriate.

[eglantine]

Thank you Mr. Edwards--hope all is well

[Infinite hexes]

This is amazing! I like how you gradually made it from simple to fiery! But I don't know what Sangria means. If it's not a bother, can you please explain?

[eglantine]

Hello, thanks! Sangria is a wine/juice blended drink :)

[Emily B]

beyond Romantic, it feels karmic, a love that repeats from one lifetime to another

[An owl on the moon]

You always paint with such enchanted, abstract colors... filled with such dancing imagery... You take us deep into these profound moments of your heart and soul...