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The evening speaks

The evening speaks

A Chapter by Eilis

It is all about perspective,
I guess. The bird’s voice hits
off the angles and soffits

between these houses, and
I can imagine him to be anywhere.
Spring-bud knees straightening,

offering every inch of song
he has curled up in his lungs.
The sun scoots behind the neighbor’s

house like a child hiding
from a stranger who has just entered
his home. The last rays are still

clinging to the roof like
fingertips holding the body,
from sinking too far.

Dear bird, little invisible,
voice that magnifies you, and
denies smallness, please

do not stop singing.


© 2026 Eilis


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Eilis
2018

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This can be read as one wonderful descriptive moment in time. As long as the bird sings, it can be enjoyed forever. But the sun hiding like a scared child, the light grasping at the edges before sinking into the dark, betrays the happiness of the poem and of the song of the bird. Maybe there is something unnerving about the oncoming silence of night. It is usually the loneliest time of the day.
Idk. Think you're right, though. It's all about perspective. Haha. I do like what you've written so far. CD

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Eilis

6 Years Ago

Thanks, CD. I’m still trying to decide if the intrusion of the ‘I guess’ thought in the poem i.. read more
CD Campbell

6 Years Ago

Np. Trying to get back to the swing of things.
Eilis

6 Years Ago

Me too. Look forward to reading more of your poems.



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the phantom songbird sounds promise of delight
in the face of the silence of the night
in the darkness his song echoes to a lite
stealing shadows emptiness fright
Oh its good to see you Eilis so much can be heard in the silence:)


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Eilis

6 Years Ago

Hi, Robert. Thanks so much. I love your poem on my poem. Delightful. Great to see you too.
A truly evocative read.
“Dear bird, little invisible,
voice that magnifies you, and
denies smallness, please

do not stop singing. “
I particularly love these lines. They are so empowering and positive. Nicely penned.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Eilis

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Fairy. I appreciate your reading.
Fairy Khan

6 Years Ago

You’re welcome.

If I had written these words, I would leave them alone, as is .. so to speak.. only to re-visit when responding to the many comments that will inevitably be left by each of my reviewing successors ...my hat is off to you again my friend....

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Eilis

6 Years Ago

Many thank yous, Neville. I am always happy to receive your thoughts. Best to you.
Neville

6 Years Ago

Tis always a pleasure & always mine..
Whatever is on the horizon, we have a choice as to how we embrace it. The bird here represents optimism to me. In times of darkness, that's what we need to cling to. To make the best out of situations. This poem is pleading for that little bit of light to always be there. Lovely to read you again Eilis. This is where your visually strong poem took me. All good wishes.

Chris

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Eilis

6 Years Ago

Hi, Chris. I enjoyed reading your take on this. I don’t always find it easy to articulate where Iâ.. read more
Chris Shaw

6 Years Ago

Thank you Eilis. Good to hear from you.
This can be read as one wonderful descriptive moment in time. As long as the bird sings, it can be enjoyed forever. But the sun hiding like a scared child, the light grasping at the edges before sinking into the dark, betrays the happiness of the poem and of the song of the bird. Maybe there is something unnerving about the oncoming silence of night. It is usually the loneliest time of the day.
Idk. Think you're right, though. It's all about perspective. Haha. I do like what you've written so far. CD

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Eilis

6 Years Ago

Thanks, CD. I’m still trying to decide if the intrusion of the ‘I guess’ thought in the poem i.. read more
CD Campbell

6 Years Ago

Np. Trying to get back to the swing of things.
Eilis

6 Years Ago

Me too. Look forward to reading more of your poems.

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