Hugs

This came to me a few months ago in a passing thought, and I just had to write it all down. :)

When you hug someone, your heart touches theirs. 

When you kiss someone, your lips touch theirs. 

A person's heart leads straight to everything that means anything to them. 

A heart knows how a person feels. It contains their true desires and emotions.

A person's lips are the words, the part of their life that they decide to confide with others.

Those words may not always be what their heart is saying. 

I think this is why a hug feels so much better than a kiss sometimes. 

While a kiss can mean the world, sometimes, all you need is a good old-fashioned hug.

Author's Note

Couldn't come up with a good title... Oh well!

Reviews

[ATG]

A very good poem with a few imperfections. First off, this line could use some touch up. "When you kiss someone, your lips touch theirs." This describe what a kiss is and in comparison to first line, feels lacking. I think a diffent choice of words in the last part of that line would help the poem start off better. The last thing I would reccommend changing is removing "sometimes" from the last line. It breaks it up unnecessarily and removing it would make the line flow better. Other than that it was a very good read.

[Elizabeth Carter]

In what way does the line seem lacking? I wrote this as a way to highlight the positives of hugs, and not necessarily to show positive of kisses. I kind of wanted to show that a hug is better, in a way, than a kiss.

[ATG]

First, I understand perfectly what the poem is about. You did a fantastic job with that. The reason the second line is lacking is because it is a simple describtion of a kiss while the first line was so much more. "When you hug someone, your heart touches theirs." That is an absolute beautiful line. This line descibes a hug wonderfully and actually makes me the reader see it in a different light. The second line, unfortunately, goes flat instead of running with it a bit. I know you are showing a hug is better than a kiss, but the second line doesn't downplay the kiss like the poem as a whole does. The second line in the poem just makes it seem like nothing. I'm sorry I'm not much help with this and the my explanation is a bit poor, but I do know that it is a hiccup in the poem and I don't want it to hold back what can be a flawless piece.

[Elizabeth Carter]

Any suggestions?:) I'm up for any! If you do, just message me them:)

[ATG]

Unfortunately, no. The only things I can compare a kiss to and downplay it at the same time don't fit and/or are too long. For example, "When you kiss someone, its like smelling a sweet flower." That doesn't fit at all with the poem and doesn't downplay it enough.

[Elizabeth Carter]

Alright, well I'll think about it and maybe come up with something. Thanks:)

[ATG]

No problem. Sorry I'm not more help with it.

[Elizabeth Carter]

It's fine! Thanks!

[Tex]

yes the hug comes as a gift, at times the kiss comes with expectations. therefore the hug is almost always welcomed. nice piece. I don't think I have seen another piece that made this observation or comparison.

very nice.

[Mir]

I think the title is perfect for it! You began with a hug, and ended with a hug.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy..]

beautiful :) i like it

[Mark Anthony Games (Hum..]

Very well said.

[Elizabeth Carter]

Thanks:)

[teardrop]

I enjoyed this write, simply wonderful. : )

[Elizabeth Carter]

Thank you!

[gabrielle]

A comparison between a hug and a kiss… Very interesting write. Nice one.

[Elizabeth Carter]

Thanks!:)