TRUE LOVE'S FIRE

 

 

Remember when you found true love?
You felt God looked down from above
You first kiss was full of fire
It was mixed with a lifetime of desire
Thinking back to its conception still causes you to perspire
You held your love so close knowing their love was true
They became your heart, your soul, your rib, that missing part of you

 

Both your hearts were on fire bursting into flames on passion's bed
Without thoughts, without names, no words needed to be said
You were joined together as one; in the rapture of lover's bliss
Lost to Hedonistic touches and engulfed in the other's kiss

 

True love's fire is something that no man can ever make
It is a love ignited by God, it is a flame you cannot sate
Heated and given inflation since the dawn of time
It is born out of fate and given warmth by lovers entwined

 

© 2012 Eddie K. Phillips

Reviews

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

Ok, this is one that I really really like. Now that I said that and yes I know this is an older poem of yours that you wrote about a month ago I have a couple things I want to point out. Now know this I am not a poet and I write on this site when I can and as I choose so always here what others have to say and then do what you want anyways that’s my motto :) Now here it goes...

Remember when you found true love? >>>Rhyme
You felt God looked down from above>>>Rhyme
and blessed you with someone to love!>>>Rhyme

(SO AT THIS POINT MY MOTH IS GETTING USED TO A "FLOW")Now...

The first kiss was full of fire>>>Rhyme
mixed with a lifetime of desire>>>Rhyme
Just thinking back to its conception>>>Screeching breaks
still causes you to perspire>>>Rhyme
(Now I am working on 2 things...what just happened and ...what were you talking about again...) Harsh I know...I am really a nice person...I swear! :)



You held them all so close>>>???
knowing they were meant for you>>>Rhyme
Your rib, that missing part of you>>>Rhyme



Your hearts were on fire............OK on this part I have nothing
bursting into flames
singeing passions' bed

Now I hope you still are reading and didn't just call me a bunch or names and moved on to the next review...smile I said all of this because I think this is an amazing piece of unfinished work that I hope you do not "move past" But come back to and re-write with a rhythm and flow to is so as your amazing words are given sweet justice as they flow of my lips like honey!

[Eddie Phillips]

I am not upset at all. I wrote this poem a year ago. it was written on a airplane enroute to Bahrain. I know the rhythm of this poem is off but I never changes it because it hold a place with me as one of the first poems I wrote in 10 years. Having said that I can go back and look at it. Additionally I am a strange poet. I write, copy write, and post. I rarely go back to look at a poem right after I write it. I leave that up to the reader to tell me what they think. I am appreciative of your suggestions. You never have to defend your thoughts with me. Thank you for reading and giving a well thought out review. I will try to look at this poem again. I may leave it the way it is because it marks a point in my life and I can see growth from that point as I have written over the last year. Thanks again

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I can't get the word fire out of the entire reading:

You first kiss was full of fire
Both your hearts were on fire bursting into flames on passion's bed
True love's fire is something that no man can ever make

you keep the reader in... and the rhyme scheme plays down the lines of this verse...

[Eddie Phillips]

Please comment. Bad or good I would appreciate the feedback. I am new on the site.