Nikolas

I know it's odd to say, but when I first saw you, my heart broke into a million peices....

I know it’s odd to say, but when I first saw you, my heart broke into a million pieces; falling into my world like snowflakes.  Your smile lightened my mood.  Your laugh made me want to laugh, too.  Your eyes glinted with the light from the halls.  All I wanted to do was fall into you to feel your arms around me in eternal embrace.  You’re the definition of a heart break, the exact words of a “vision of perfection”.  The exact person to help kill my promise never to love again.  The one to bring back all my fears, to help my dead heart begin beating painfully all over again….

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Laura Ex]

i lovve all the stories you write. you're descriptions and use of words are so fanfreakin'tastic!
like, unbelievebly gorgeous.

[Ian]

"The exact person to help kill my promise never to love again"

Love that line... It all comes to it... that's such a wnderful line... so true...
Beautiful! I like the whole piece but that line just caught me...
Great job!

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is such a complex piece of writing, yet it deals with the issue of heart break but still it is so soft and written with such a great sensitivity.
"I know it's odd to say, but when I first saw you, my heart broke into a million pieces;"- great work :)

[17thWhitePrince]

WoW ... a really nice story indeed !!!
Wonderfully written !!!
Very very nice ...
A marvel to read !!!

[wolfsshadow25]

this was a good poem now what nick is it about

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Bitter love. :)