Magical Creek

It's like the fountain of youth

But there's no youth

It's like a big waterfall

But there's no big

It's like a rainbow

But with no gold

The creek

Is magical

Yes, a magical

Creek

It holds secret better

Than humans can

But don't let it fool you

Because this creek

Can turn into a

Tsunami

Within seconds

Of you turning.

 Ist Place 

Apr 24, 2016

• Something Different
• Yellow Tape

Author's Note

Hope you like it!
I wrote it for a contest.
If you have ever read The Scarlet Letter, there is a creek called the Brooke. That's where I got most of my inspiration from.

Reviews

[Terrence Chang]

Emily you have a great style of writing poems. I think that you have mastered this technique of writing style. Don't get me wrong but I would like to see you try another style of writing if you don't mind. Keep posting.

[Emily]

Thanks! I do want to try different styles of poetry, I just don't know which one yet.

[Terrence Chang]

How about a haiku

[Emily]

I was thinking about that one. Maybe, I'll give it a go.

[Terrence Chang]

All the best

[Lavender Soya]

Another short but potent piece, particularly why I love reading your poems. I love the strong finish. Thanks for sharing Emily! :-)

[Emily]

Thank you!!

[Lavender Soya]

You're welcome.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

"It holds secret better
Then humans can" - I think it is supposed to be than?

Beautiful poem lovely imagery well done :)

[Emily]

Thanks! Your right it should be than, I will fix that!

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

I like the comparisons/contrasts. Good use of metaphors, this piece holds a number of meanings for me. Nice job!

[Emily]

Thanks Sharon!!

[ANTO]

"Do not despise the snake for not having horns - for who will say that it will not become a dragon" -
from a creek to tsunami - a cautious poem in the telling Emily.
Cool writing - good luck in the contest - if it isnt over already - xD

[Emily]

Thank you!!

[Kami Grace]

A nice little piece! Very interesting indeed :)

[Emily]

Thanks Kami!

[Deepika]

All that glitters is not gold! Somethings are worth admiring from far. You loose your heart on such things and there you get drowned and lost completely. I liked the idea :))

[Emily]

Thanks Deepika!!

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Interesting poem you have here. :) I like the idea of this, very well put.

[Emily]

Thank you!!

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome.

[Cindy Marietta]

This is a pretty cool idea, I like it!

[Emily]

Thanks Amanda!

[Jamestown]

Very nice! I enjoyed the theme and the end was really cool! Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Emily]

Thank you!